Sunday 10 October 2010

Escape To Victory

I recently had to cut this panel from a script whilst revising it:

Very close on Soldier 1. We can see his terrified expression through the mask.

SOLDIER 1: JESUS CHRIST!


A shame as the religious allusion was deliberate, but I had to cut it to make way for something cooler. As a writer who does tend to love his first drafts, going back and tweaking is a skill I probably need to get better at.

Steven, on the other hand, seems to do pretty well on the first attempt.

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