Very close on Soldier 1. We can see his terrified expression through the mask.
SOLDIER 1: JESUS CHRIST!
A shame as the religious allusion was deliberate, but I had to cut it to make way for something cooler. As a writer who does tend to love his first drafts, going back and tweaking is a skill I probably need to get better at.
Steven, on the other hand, seems to do pretty well on the first attempt.
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